The Retirees Club (07)
At the next guys night out
A volunteer finds his gateway to the maure women he desires
My neighbor Julie throws a party for her friends
It was my lucky day when we entered the store without a changing room.
As I opened my eyes, I looked at the clock next to the bed .It was gone 11:00 am.Normally I used to wake up before 9 in the morning . But I never had sex with a hot girl before.So it didn’t really matter. I was naked, my dick was still wet with the cum of my sister ,my clothes were scattered all over the floor. Every boy would have definitely dreamed of being in this situation. Thanks to my sister, my dream turned into reality. As the word sister came into my mind, I got off the bed to search for my girl. I searched for her in the bedroom, in the bathroom but she was nowhere to be found. Then I went downstairs to search for her.
“Hey hottie” I said softly as i walked into the kitchen. She was standing near the sink.She was wearing a top and panty.I immediately went over to her and wrapped my arms around her waist squeezing her tightly.
“Hey sexy” she said. She slowly turned around and gave me a long passionate kiss on my lips.
“what are you doing” I asked as I took a chair and sat beside her
“Making breakfast for both of us.You must be hungry, aren’t you”? she asked while cutting vegetables
“Yeah! But you don’t have to make lunch for that.I can adjust with a desert “I winked.She was smiling as she understood the intention behind my words.
“Oh really?”
“Yeah” I laughed.
“What’s the matter? You didn’t wear anything except your underwear” she asked as she looked me from head to toe.
“I didn’t want to take the pain of removing my clothes to have you in my arms and put my thing inside you” I answered
“Oh my ! where’s my little shy brother. The guy who felt shy to remove his clothes” she said by raising her eyebrows
“I don’t know” I winked.
After having our lunch, we both went to hall to watch TV.She was watching her favorite movie but I was busy observing my sister.I had never been so close to a hot girl . Every boy in my class had a girlfriend, even the dumbest guys.During the weekends, my friends used to go out with their girlfriends but stayed at home. These things really made me feel bad.Now I have a girl beside me who was more sexy than any girl in my class. I wanted to forget all those bad memories with the help of my sister. So without wasting even a single second I quickly got on top of her and started kissing. She was surprised with the move I made but she didn’t object.Few minutes later she pulled me away and started looking my eyes.
“Not here.Let us take it to a more comfortable place baby” She said. She grabbed my hand and we ran upstairs .I pulled off her top as we went dropping it on the staircase. We burst through the door kissing; our bodies pressed together, our tongues pressed into each other’s mouths. Holding on to my sister’s shoulders i pulled her inside and closed the door behind us. I grabbed her around the waist and lowered my head to her left nipple sucking it into my mouth and picking my sister up off the ground. She threw her head back as i was licking her nipple.She brought her hand to the back of my head, again, as i licked and sucked on it like a little baby looking for milk. She leaned her body back, pressing her chest further out to my face, which was becoming engulfed by her cleavage, as moved across to the other nipple. I lowered her to the floor and quickly attacked her other nipple, once more licking and sucking hard as she brought her head to the side of me to whisper in my ear.
“Ohh… god , yessss… suck my nipple baby. Yes, that’s sooo gooodddd. Aaahhhh…” She moaned out softly, before poking her tongue in my ear, tickling the sensitive inside with the wet, warm tip of her tongue.
Her tongue was licking the outside of my lips before pushing inside my mouth to mingle . I felt her press her breasts against my chest hard as she leaned forward to get her face closer to mine. She brought her hands to the sides and mouth to my stomach, which she began kissing, pressing her tongue around my belly button and giving me little kisses just above my underwear. This was driving me mad with pleasure.
She stood up again and i sat up on the bed. As my sexy sister stood before me, i brought my hands up and grabbed the waistband of her knickers and pulled the frilly cotton down her legs letting them go so they would drop to the floor. I was now facing her pussy. I brought my right hand up between her legs and grabbed her ass pressing my fingers into the supple flesh.
“Ohhh ooohhh…” She moaned . She kept her hands on my shoulders for support .Now her pussy was in line with my mouth. I closed my eyes and let instinct guide me as i moved forward and placed my lips on her pubic mound.I pushed her thighs wider open to open up her pussy for my exploring tongue. The sweet smell of arousal filled my nose as my tongue made contact with her dripping sex.
“AAAhhhhhh oohhhhhhh hhhhmmmmm…” She moaned as i touched her ass while my tongue touched the inner part of her pussy. She threw her head back as i touched a sensitive spot and she shouted out loudly for more. She pulled me off the bed and onto my knees. Not letting go of her ass, i was still in the same position, with my face buried in her pussy and my arms still between her legs. She moaned louder and more frequently as i began to knead her soft ass cheeks with my hands. “Ohhhhhhh ggoooooooooddddddd aaahhhhhhh ooohhhhhh oh oh aahhh.” She was shouting . She held head tightly in each hand so that she directed me to the places she wanted to feel my tongue go.
I hit just the right place as a flood of fluid flow from her body which shook in orgasm. Her hands holding my head tight, her cum dripping all over my face and down her thighs onto my arms.
She came down soon after.I watched as she lowered herself onto my cock, which easily slid into her. “Ahhhh ahhhh oohhh…” She moaned as she, with my help, began to grind her pussy onto my cock. I held her waist with my both hands and with strong forearms i helped her lift her up my cock and down again, taking it out to the head then back to the hilt, deep in her pussy. The moaning and groaning continued as we two moved as one; I took my sister’s ample nipples into my mouth and squeezing her ass cheeks as i felt my cock being put in a vice like grip by my sister’s pussy. We were both ready to cum. We were shouting out loudly.I kept shooting my load inside her like a machine gun. Few minutes later her juices flowed all over my cock. We both laid beside each other and took a long time to catch our breaths.
“Brother. I think we should clean ourselves .We both are covered with sweat and cum.” She laughed
“Yeah sure, why not”
“Why don’t we hit the beach today. We can clean overselves , enjoy and I have never been to the beach with you before” she suggested
I liked the idea because i never really had the chance to visit the beach. Dad was always busy with work and mom would never let me go alone.Mom was afraid of the people who came to beach to make love with their partners.Now it was a perfect chance to go to beach.I was not alone and I have a partner. So I got up and quickly got into my wore swim trunks and a t-shirt. She went to her bedroom and after few minutes she came out wearing small purple tank top and some booty shorts.
“Where’s your bikini” I enquired
“Its in my bag.Dont worry dear, I will wear it after we reach our destination. ok ?”she smiled
We quickly locked the door and got inside the car. Within no time we reached our destination as the beach was near to my sister’s house.The smell of the sea water tickled my nose as we walked to the beach. She had to wear bikini so she went to the ladies bathroom . As I was busy imagining my sister in various bikini’s, I felt a hand resting on my shoulders.
“Ready to go “she asked as she tried to adjust her thong.
As I turned around, I saw a beautiful girl wearing a white string bikini in front of me. The small cups of her bikini squeezed her D cup breasts together and brought them higher up so they looked even perkier .The beautiful girl was none other than Jessica, my sister. I literally wanted to have her in my arms and my dick inside her pussy. I held her hand and walked past the people who came with their family and friends.I liked the attention. Even some of my friends were present at the beach. They were looking at both of us with a confused face. I really loved the look on their faces. We walked deep inside the ocean and played with the water by splashing at each other. The water waves added more fun.I was enjoying each and every minute with my sister. Few minutes later we came out of the water and claimed a spot where my friends can easily see both of us. We laid down beside each other. Jessica set down her purse and laid down a towel.
She applied lotion to every part of her body and covered her eyes with the help of sunglasses. My friends were still watching us with their wide open eyes to figure out the situation. I leaned my head towards her cheek and started kissing it . Little later, I slowly lifted my hand and started massaging her breasts through the top.
“Mm, that feels good hun.” She moaned
Slowly i slid her bra down; revealing her soft breasts.
“No! There are way too many people here brother
“Oh come on Sis, not that many people will see you, besides we are not the only one here who are making love” i said pointing out to the couples who were naked
“We had sex a little while ago.why dont you lay down and take some rest.I’ll let you fuck the shit out of me after we get home” she said ,trying to convince me.
I wanna fuck the shit out of you here,right now!”
I knew i was behaving like a baby but i didn’t want to loose this opportunity.
“Fine here, take off my bra, if that makes you happy ”
“Trust me Sis. You are going to enjoy it”
I undid her top and tossed it aside; revealing her breasts to the beach.
My friends and some kids playing nearby got that instant boners as they watched me play joyfully with her boobs.Then i played with her nipples. Then i slowly moved my head near her lips and kissed her.As my left hand stayed on her breasts, I slid my right hand down her stomach. And slowly it slid to her pussy. I rubbed her pussy. I could feel the wet spot getting bigger. She moaned. I took this as a green light and peeled her thong down.
” no brother “she gasped
I just shushed her. I slid the panties down her legs, off the feet and cast them aside a few feet away where her top laid. I stuck my finger in her pussy and started fingering her. She moaned. As i started going faster and faster she moaned louder.
I moved my mouth on her pussy and started licking away. I moved my tongue deep in her pussy.
She wrapped her legs around my head
“Ohhhh ” She moaned as she orgasmed once again. I kept my mouth on her pussy to drink her tasty juices.
When i finished, i lied back down beside her.
“Do you want me to stop”
“Naah!” She laughed
I put her bikini in her bag. She didn’t object.
I got on top of her and took off my shirt. I slid down my pants and she grabbed my cock. I knew she wanted it. I thrust my cock deep inside her. She moaned.I did it again, and again as i found my rhythm She spread her legs wider and clenched the sand around us.Her tits bounced up with every blow to her pussy
“Yeah Baby! Fuck me harder” she begged
I quickened my rhythm. Every thrust made her let out a squeal. I fucked her faster and faster. I fucked her like an animal. It was amazing.
I withdrew as I was about to cum, i grabbed her tits and wrapped them around my dick. Soon i came all over her chest.She grabbed her breasts and licked the cum off of each.
It was getting late, my friends left as the show we put on came to an end.We were tired to get up so we decided to take some rest and then go home. She was in my arms; Her pussy was touching my limp penis, and i was slowly massaging her breasts.
The sight was beautiful; the sun was slowly going down.While I was looking at the sunset, she was looking at me. She wanted to ask me something, but something was stopping her.
“Do you want to say something sis?” i asked
“I….
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Everything I write is pretty much fiction. I write on the topics that fascinate me, even if I have absolutely no intention on doing them. But this time I’m writing about an actual experience and I would love to know what your thoughts are. I have changed the names and dates of those involved to protect the innocent or to respect the participants privacy. I would love to know if you think I should continue to feel bad about this incident.
this is a continuation from my first story. let me know what you think. the title is pretty self explanatory
An unexpected incident changes my relationship with Amy and Amber.
This is the true story of how I started dating my girlfriend Jackie.
Here’s a quick background on the two of us. My name Jordan I’m 15 and 6’2” with a 7” cock and a body builder’s body I have medium length brown hair and a chiseled face. Her name is Jackie she’s 15 and 5’6” with 21 D tits and a nice juicy ass and a slim figure she has long brown flowing hair and the face of an angel. We are both German and Hispanic and we both grew up in Germany and latter moved to Texas. And I have made a fortune by investing in medicinal marijuana dispensaries, and of course I smoke a little myself. We live in a town that’s about an hour drive from Austin.
We first met in German class on about the second week of school, after talking for a bit we learned we shared many of the same friends, so I invited her to hang out with our group. The next morning she came and hung out with our group, from that moment on I knew that I wanted to date her and definitely fuck her. Me her and two other friends became best friends in about a month’s time. We remained like this until October when she started dating one of those gangster black guys (which I loathe).
After about two weeks of dating she had isolated herself and wouldn’t talk to anyone except her boyfriend. I constantly asked her what was the matter but she would never answer me and get highly defensive. I wouldn’t actually find out what was wrong until mid way through November.
(The day I found out what was wrong) I had to stay after school to work out for the power lifting tournament that was coming up. I was walking out of the main entrance to get to the parking lot; I had walked out the doors when I heard someone crying. I looked around and spotted Jackie sitting on the ground behind the gym arch way. Being the good friend I am I went over and sat down next to her, she looked up and saw that it was me. She immediately fell into my lap and started crying, I brushed a piece of hair out of her face.
“What’s wrong” I asked her sympathetically.
Her crying died down a little bit and she gave a few sniffles, “its Darrell (her boyfriend) he hit me.” “WHAT!” I yelled I was beyond mad that that sack of shit laid a hand on her. She started crying again “It started a few weeks ago, he started stealing from me to support his meth addiction and when I confronted him he hit me.” She let out another big sob and wrapped my arms around in a sad attempt to console her. “Then today he wouldn’t quit touching me and wanted me to suck his dick, and when I told him no he hit me again and told me since I wasn’t going to put out I could walk home.” We sat there for a few minutes as I continued to hold her in my lap.
She finally looked up at me “Jordan, I don’t want to go home, what if he comes by to hurt me.” “Well since its Friday you can come stay at my house in Austin for the weekend”, “Is that okay?” She looked up and nodded, I helped her get up and we went to my car. I drove her home so she could pack a bag for the weekend. We then drove to Austin; we got there at about 7:30. I showed her the guest room; after she changed I came back to the room to make sure she was okay. She was sitting on the bed wearing a skimpy spaghetti strap top with yoga pants (DAMN!). “Are you still doing okay?” I asked her, “Yeah, do you think you can do me a favor.” “Sure anything”, “I want to go to sleep but I don’t feel safe so will you sleep with me.” “Sure”, I got up and turned off the lights and climbed in bed with her, she curled up next to me and I wrapped my hands around her. It only took her 15 minutes for her to fall asleep, once that happened I knew what I needed to do next, kick the shit out of her douche bag boyfriend.
Before I left the house I texted a friend to find out where he was at, and as per usual he was hanging out getting high at these shity apartments. I quickly drove to the apartments and found him sitting on a curb getting high. I got out of the car and walked over to him he barely took notice of me, “Do you like hitting girls.” He didn’t answer me he just laughed and stood up; he came over to me and started to get into my face.
“I love hitting women”, bam the first hit and that was it I couldn’t be stopped I just continued to pound the shit out of him. I didn’t stop till the adrenaline surge wore off; I looked down and saw a crumpled bleeding bitch on the ground. I spat on him and walked back to my car, and drove beck to Austin.
Once I got home I slowly walked towards my room, once I got to my room I started to undress. When I noticed a lump in my bed “what the hell” I whispered to myself once I got close enough to the bed I pulled back the covers to see Jackie. She looked so cute the sudden cold air hitting her skin made her wake up. She looked around for a few minutes until she realized where she was at, she looked at me and smiled at me. “Where have you been at?” she asked, “I just had to run a few errands.” “Sorry for stealing your bed, I just didn’t feel safe in the other room”, I brushed her hair out of her face “That’s fine I’ll go sleep in the other room.” “No stay”, she pulled back the covers and patted the bed “Get in bed with me.” I smiled to myself and pulled off my shirt, and reached towards my pants, “Keep the pants on Romeo” she said laughing. I laughed to and climbed in bed with her, she quickly snuggled up against me and I wrapped my arms around her we quickly feel asleep.
When I woke up she was still asleep in my arms, so I decided to step out onto the balcony and smoke a joint. I had just finished smoking when I heard the balcony door close I turned around and saw Jackie she came and hugged me we hugged for a few seconds, and then I turned her around so we could both look over the balcony. She looked up “I’m going to go change” she said, “I think I will to” she ran back into the house and I followed.
I put my shirt back on and walked downstairs, I went into the kitchen to see what I could make for breakfast. I decided to make some muffins I put them in the stove, I heard Jackie coming down the stairs. I turned around right as she walked into the kitchen, she was holding her phone and had an impossible to read poker face. “Nick (our best friend) just text me, he says that you went and beat the shit out of Darrell last night, was he telling the truth?” Since it was impossible to read her emotions I didn’t know exactly how to respond “Well I’d be lying if I said I didn’t.” She continued to dead stare as she slowly walked towards me; I was actually kind of scared that she might hit me. Then she cracked she laid her head on my chest and started crying. I embraced her and started to run my fingers through her hair, “I knew I should have broken up with him the minute he started stealing from me, but he always hit me.” “I know that’s why I took care of him for you” I said she gave me a soft hit in the stomach, “Why did you do that you could’ve gotten hurt?” “He never could’ve hurt me”, “I know but I care about you” “wait what”, she sniffled a few times and smiled up at me “I care about you”
I leaned down towards her and she leaned into me and we kissed hard and long for a few minutes (this was the best moment of my life). Finally we unlocked lips and we looked into each other’s eyes, this was the best moment of my life. Then I smelt something burning, THE MUFFINS, I ran back to the stove “Oh shit, oh shit, oh shit”, Jackie started laughing as I scrambled to put on oven mitts and grab the muffins. Jackie came up and gave a playful push out of the way; she grabbed a towel and got the muffins out of the oven. I hopped onto the island and watched as she sprinkled sugar on the muffins, and all that continued to run through my mind is that this has to be a dream.
She finished with the muffins and turned around with a huge smile on her face she slowly walked towards me. She put her hands on my shoulders and lifted herself into my lap with her legs and arms wrapped around me. She pushed me down onto the island and started kissing me as hard as she could, I leaned back and just let her take over my body (I take it back this was the best moment of my life). It made me feel so great it was like my heart was about to explode, to help brace myself from her excessive mauling of my face, I grabbed her ass it felt so right.
Then to make the growing matter in my pants even better she started to grind her sweet pussy against my cock. We were like to animals caught in a rage of lust, we couldn’t stop mauling each other. She finally stopped to take a breather she sat there once again looking deep into my eyes, I couldn’t stop panting, and she continued to look into my eyes. And I couldn’t help but think how great this moment was; she slowly dragged her hand down my chest to grab my raging hard-on. She made a ticking sound “Naughty naughty boy didn’t you ever learn that you don’t get to use that on the first date.” She slid off my lap and grabbed a muffin, I sat up and she threw a muffin at me I caught it and bit in. We continued with our senseless teenage love for the rest of the day, not close to the magnitude of that morning.
It was about 9 that night and we were sitting in the home theater watching a movie. It was a perfect moment I was sitting on the jumbo sized chair while she was sitting in my lap with a throw blanket over the both of us. I had my arms wrapped around her beautiful body while her head was nestled in between my chest and shoulder; it was perfect enough that I could rest my chin on her head.
We stayed like that until the movie was over; once it was over she turned to me and wrapped her arms around my neck. She leaned in and kissed me for a seconds, she pulled away “I’m sleepy, what about you?” she said in the cutest sexiest voice ever, “Sure I could sleep”, “Carry me to bed please” giving me another look “Of course sweet heart.” I picked her up and carried her to my room; I dropped her onto the bed.
Granted she let go of my neck but grabbed the front of my shirt and pulled me down for another round of mauling. But it seemed like she was having second thoughts, she pushed me away I was about to ask why “go out in the hall so I can change for you.” I didn’t need telling twice I got off the bed and ran into the hall, I ran down to the bathroom so I myself could freshen up. I slapped on some cologne and pulled off my shirt and pulled my pants and boxers to show off my hip V.
“Jordan I’m ready”, she called out I immediately hauled ass out of the bathroom and ran towards the bedroom. I stopped in front of the door and checked to make sure everything was the way I left it in the bathroom; everything was good time to go. I slowly opened the door and walked in; once she saw me she gave a little giggle “I see you got ready too.” I sat there and looked her up and down, she was magnificent she was lying on the bed. She had put mascara, eye liner, and lipstick on. And she had changed out of her clothes into a lace thong and bra set with one of my suit jackets on to make a half ass attempt to cover up.
Judging by the next little laugh she let out I must have been slack jawed, I tried to recover but there was no use I was paralyzed. She slowly slid off the bed and started to walk towards me in very slinky and provocative manner. She gave me a playful push, then wrapped her arms around my neck “what do you think”, “damn” she started laughing and reached up and kissed me. “So I’m guessing you weren’t all that tired”, I asked “I think you already know that, given that you have no shirt on, pulled your pants down, and slopped on that cologne.” We both let out a little laugh “well I see you found my suits”, she smiled “I thought it might be a classy touch to a skanky look.” “I see, very deceptive, yet incredibly sexy.”
We both stood there for a few seconds admiring each other’s bodies, “So what exactly are we going to do tonight” I asked. This was the first time she looked serious all night, “I don’t know I’ve never done anything before, but I guess if you’ll be gentle we can do anything you want.” All the little whistles in my head started going off and the little voice was screaming “HELL YEAH.”
“Well I have had some experience in this field of work, so do you know some of the main styles or at least heard about them?” I asked. “Well I’ve heard about oral, and I’ve seen some porn videos that my dad has, and there’s one thing that my friend told me about that sounds really interesting but I’m not sure.” “Ooohhh my baby is kinky” I said jokingly she gave me a soft punch, “I’m kidding do you remember what the name of it.” “I think it was called 69ing?” “Oh my god do you know how much I love you right now, but I think that might be a little advanced for you right now.”
“I think we should just start with some old fashioned sex”, “That sounds great.” She wrapped her hands around my neck and pulled me towards the bed and then down on top of her. We started kissing really hard; she pushed me over and climbed on top of me. She pulled the jacket off so she was only in panties and a bra, she leaned down to kiss me and that’s when I noticed it. She had a fist sized bruise on her shoulder, I stopped her to take a look at it and she seemed to be ashamed that I saw it. I slowly leaned up and kissed the bruise in any attempt to make her feel better or make it go away.
That only lasted for about ten seconds then, came back down and started kissing me as harder than she ever had that day. Our tongues were locked together as we kissed harder and harder, I decided to do what I had done later and grabbed the hell out of her plump juicy ass. She finally let go of my face and started moving down my body, till she got down to my pants she looked up at me and let out a smile. She ripped off my belt and pulled of my pants in less than 5 seconds, to reveal my cock standing completely at attention, tenting my boxer briefs. I looked up at her and laughed as she stood there in astonishment, she smiled and climbed back on top of me and started grinding my cock while kissing me.
I decided since she was getting to do whatever she wanted to do to my body that I was going to do the same thing her. I took my hand off her ass and then slapped it back down, she let out a big gasp and I guess that pushed her to the next level because she bit down on my shoulder. Oh my god did that feel so amazing I almost came right then and there. She got up a little and started pulling down my boxer’s; I grabbed her hand “I believe I’m the only one not wearing a top right now.” She smiled and gave me another more kiss “Do you want to do the honors or should I” she asked. In response I reached behind her with one hand and popped the strap of her bra and ripped it off.
Once the bra left her tits dropped a little and gave a little bounce, and oh my god were they the most beautiful thing that I ever saw, the only thing was that they sagged a little bit but that was expected with her tits the size they were. She sat there and gave them a little shake as I stared slack jawed at her. That’s when the inner sex monster in me came out, I flipped her over and started going to town on those gorgeous globes. As I continued to maul her she moaned in ecstasy that just fueled my sexual rampage of her body.
She pushed me off her and let out one last moan, and then she motioned for me to stand. She reached over and grabbed my boxer’s and started to pull them down but she couldn’t with my cock holding the boxer’s in place. Since she couldn’t get the boxer’s off she sent her hand down the front of my boxer’s and pulled my dick out and pulled the boxers to my ankles. I kicked them off and I jumped back onto her, and kept licking and sucking her tits like a baby trying to nurse. This time when I stopped I grabbed her sexy lace panties, and shoved my nose down there before I pulled them down it smelt like the most beautiful flower in the world; the name of that flower is virginity.
She let out a soft moan as I continued to sniff her like a dog sniffs for drugs. Then I slowly slipped her panties down and all the way off, she smiled as I gazed down at her beautiful shaven pussy. I tore my eyes away and took one last deep breath of her panties, then I reached into the night stand and pulled out a condom. I opened the package and took out the condom before I could put the condom on, she grabbed it from me and started to unroll it then she slid it down my cock. Her hands sliding down felt absolutely amazing, I looked down at her “Are you ready for this Jackie”…“Yes, fuck me.”
I grabbed my cock and guided it towards her tight pussy, I rubbed my cock up and down her lips to moisten them up. She let out another soft moan, then I pushed in she moaned and squirmed in pleasure, I only managed to get about an inch in she was so damn tight, I pulled out and she let out another moan. I didn’t mean to pull my dick out all the way but she was tight it was nearly impossible not to. So before I went back in I moistened her pussy up again with the tip of my dick. Then I pushed my dick back in she nearly screamed because this time I hit her hymen, I didn’t go through but I hit it.
I pulled my dick out again but it didn’t go out of her pussy but this time there was blood leaking out of her pussy and some on my cock. I pushed in again and once again hit the hymen, I pulled back again. Jackie was lying there moaning and squirming in ecstasy, “Jackie this next time I’m going to bust through your hymen it is going to hurt really bad but after that it’s going to be amazing, are you ready.” Her face was stuck somewhere between pain and ecstasy she bit her bottom and shook her head as she gripped the sheets.
I did it quick like a band aid one good thrust all the way through the hymen, she screamed in pain and ecstasy. I left my dick in the same spot for about 30 seconds; she kept squirming as my dick reshaped her petite pussy. I finally pulled all the way out she gasped in relief I laid down closer to her and bit her neck she once again moaned in ecstasy. We kissed once again, then I got back into position and shoved my cock back and this time the whole 7” went in. Jackie started moaning louder, now that I had stretched her out and broken through her hymen I was going to speed things up so we could get off.
I started at a slow rate and started to speed up Jackie was moaning louder and louder as I sped up. After about a minute I got her tit back in my mouth and kept licking and biting it this only increased her moaning. That only lasted for about 20 seconds she starts yelling “OH GOD OH GOD OH GOD, JORDN I’M ABOUT TO CUM!!!!” “So am I baby so am I.” Another 15 seconds later I felt her cum I felt her juices run all over my cock. I was about to cum myself I pulled my dick out of her and ripped off the condom, I jerked myself for may ‘be 3 seconds then I came all over her stomach.
We both lay there panting and trying to recover fell onto my side so I wouldn’t have to lay in my cum. Jackie turned towards me scooping up some of the cum and sticking it in her mouth, “that was the best thing ever” she said. “You we’re the best girl I’ve ever been with” she rolled on top of me which kind of ruined the point of rolling over. “So how many girls have you slept with?” she asked jokingly but I could hear a hint of jealously “None of them were women compared to you.”
We started hugging each other and she laid her head on my chest, I started running my fingers through her hair. I kissed the top of her head, she looked up at me “So what do we do now?” she asked. “Well given that were both covered in cum and sweat I think we should go take a shower.” “Instead of a shower can we take a bath”, I laughed “Sure whatever you want.”
She started to get up but I grabbed her and lifted her up and carried her into the bathroom, she started laughing. I placed her as softly as I could into the jet tub and I turned on the water and climbed in behind her. She leaned back and kissed me we kissed for a few minutes. Then she let go of the embrace and she reached back and grabbed the back of my head. I reached over and turned on the jets, we sat there for awhile then I felt her shift.
She started moaning, “What are you doing”, she laughed and moaned again “are you using the jets to get off. She laughed harder “You are such a bad girl”, I reached in between her legs and started fingering her she moaned harder. I started laughing I started fingering her harder and harder, she was once again moaning in ecstasy. I was getting a hard-on again so with one hand I kept fingering her with the other hand I grabbed her tit and started twisting her nipple.
She started breathing heavy like she had before “Stop Jordan, I’m going to cum again.” That only encouraged me to finger her harder and faster; “OH GOD!” she got all tense then completely relaxed she leaned back and kissed my neck, “thank you baby” “You’re welcome.” I reached over and grabbed the soap and began to clean her off then myself, I then grabbed the shampoo and started to clean her hair it was so long and beautiful. Once we were both clean I lifted her out of the bath tub and dried us both off, then I carried her back to the bed. We climbed into the bed together naked and I pulled the sheets over us and we snuggled together until we fell asleep.
THE END OF PART: 1
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5 months ago, my parents died in a car accident, involving a drunk driver. Soon after, I was sent to live with my dad’s younger brother, Max, up in the mountains hours away from my old home. One day, sometime during the night, I happen to pass my Uncle’s bedroom and happen to catch him doing something that will forever change my life.
A brother watches his sister getting it on with her boyfriend
I watched as she walked out of the
shadows and into the illumination of a streetlight, looking at the ground as she walked. She wore the short skirt and crop top that was the uniform required by her employers at the bar she waitressed at till 2am most nights. It was by chance that I witnessed what she did for extra money whenever the occasion arose.
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Well it was nice and warm today for my 13th birthday we celebrated by going having a picnic on the beach. It was just mum, dad and my sister with our dog Jack. We played for ages building sandcastles and swimming. I’ve never really gotten along with mum, we tend to fight alot about everything but we didn’t even have any cross words with each other, it was a relief. We went home at about 4pm because mum had to work tonight waitressing and my sister Sally wanted to go over to her friends house to sleep the night.
I played out back for a while with Jack in my cubby house. It was just getting on dusk before I came in, mum was just leaving Sally left earlier.
Dad told me that he was going to order pizza for tea and that I should have a shower first. I mucked around as you do for a while in my room before heading for the shower. It was nice getting the salt from the sea off my body and wasing my hair. I came out and watched some tv with dad until the pizza arrived.
After we ate we put a video on, the dead poets society and watched this for a while. I had never seen this film before but it was really sad. I started crying when the character killed himself, it was so sad.
Dad opened his arms which I went to to get some confort, sitting on his lap and hugging him. He kept stroking my hair and rubbing my back all the while I was sniffling. I was worn out from the day and the crying I had done, I was starting to get dozzy on dad.
He kissed me on the lips and whispered to me not to be sad as it was only a movie. He kept kissing me on my checks but comming back to my lips all the time. I just snuggled closer to him until the last kiss on the lips where I felt his tongue enter my mouth, it felt funny. I had never been kissed this way before. His large hands were still rubbing my back and hair keeping me close to him while he explored my mouth. I blinked my eyes open when he stoped and looked at him, he just smiled at me and pulled me closer. I felt very contented all cozied up with dad on the couch. I don’t know what was wrong with me ’cause I didn’t seem to have any energy, I was very lathargic.
We stayed that way for a little while until dad told me that it was bed time, I didn’t protest as I was sleepy. He picked me up and took me to my parents bed instead of mine, I didn’t protest.
Dad put me in the middle of the bed under the sheet and went to the bathroom. He came back and slipped under the sheet with me in the bed and snuggled up to me, pulling the top half of me onto his chest. He started to rub my back again, it felt really nice. Then he started to kiss my neck and checks until he found my mouth and started to kiss me again. I really liked it, I hadn’t been kissed like this before.
His hands continued to massage my side as well as my back. Then I felt his hands on the skin of my back, he must have lifted my nighty up, I didn’t even notice him doing that as he was still kissing me. This went on for a while with him massaging more of me, moving his hands down to my bottom and squeezing and then moving up and over to my sides and back down, I didn’t seem to care as I was still in a bit of a daze. He was pushing me tightly to him it felt very good.
Then he stopped kissing and massaging me and sat me up, telling me what a good girl I was and that he was giving me a special birthday present, I just smiled at him as I couldn’t seem to think that much I was in such a daze. He lifted my hands up above my head and pulled off my nighty and then laid me back on the bed and pulled my undies off. Then he laid back down with me, both of us in the nude.
Dad continued to massage me all over my tummy, running his hands from my back and bottom to the front and up to my boobs while continuing to kiss me. I was still liking what he was doing he made me feel so good, touching me. Then he moved his head down and started to lick and suck on my boobs, he was making them get hard like they do when I’m really cold. I had never felt this way before it was nice but a bit scarry, I still couldn’t get enough energy to move away from him or protest, I just lay their letting him do what he wanted.
Dad continued to touch me with his hands and mouth for a while. He then moved one of his hands down to my privates. He started to rub me down there for a while probing me with one of his big fingers. I was squirming a little under him as I seemed to be doing this automatically. He was mumbling to me, telling me what a good girl I was and that he loved me so much. He started to rub me harder putting more pressure against me while he rubbed his whole body against me. I could feel somthing odd on my side near my leg, like he was rubbing something there as well as his finger down below.
He then picked up one of my hands and moved it down to the thing rubbing at my side. He placed it around his thing and started to move it up and down, he started to groan while doing this. His finger was still moving around in me down below and then it stilled. He was pushing it against me, god there was so many sensations, I didn’t know what was going on. Then I felt it, his finger was in me slowly moving around in me. I must have made a noise, I don’t know because there was so many things happening to me but I didn’t seem to be in contol, dad’s whispering changed to how much he knew I liked what he was doing and that he knew I was dirty girl and would love what he was doing.
Dad started to get a bit faster at probing into me pushing his whole finger in and out of me then he pulled his finger out completly. I felt him again at my entrance, slowly putting pressure to get inside again but it was more pressure than last time, then he slipped into me again but it was thicker than before. I don’t know what he did but it still felt like his fingers down there. He moved around in me, stretching me with his fingers while he picked up speed, it hurt a bit but I was getting used to it. He continued to move in me for a while, I was still in a daze not really caring.
At last he withdrew his fingers and sat up and started to suck on his fingers. He told me what a good girl I was and that he was going to give me his present now. He kissed me again on the lips, rougher this time shoving his tongue in me and then pulling away. I knew what he was doing was wrong but I couldn’t really stop it, I was still dazed, I didn’t seem to have the energy to protest I just let him do what he wanted, I had conflicting emotions as a part of me felt good and another part of me knew what we were doing is not right.
Dad piled some pillows up and then manovoured me on the top of them so that I was facing down with my bottom in the air, he placed my legs agart so that I was on my knees with my head and arms down across the bed, I didn’t even have the energy to hold myself up, only the pillows did this.
I felt him behind me, his chest across my back, his thing was being rubbed across my privates. All the while he was telling me I was going to love this, his present and that I shouldn’t be scared as he was only showing me how much he loved me. Then I felt his thing pushing against me where his fingers were before. He had his hands on my waist holding me while he continued to push against me. Then I felt it, he was in me, I could feel him slowly pushing further in me even though he was inside me. God it hurt. Something let go in me and he was all the way in me, I didn’t know he could go that far in. He was still for a moment before he started to move back and forth in me, pushing me forward and backwards by my waist where he had his grip. I could feel the pain this was causing but it seemed dulled, like it really wasn’t me that was feeling it. He continued to move me on his thing, back and forth all the while telling me he knew I would love it and that he could tell I was enjoying myself. He kept up his thrusting in and out of me for what felt like forever until I could feel him get even bigger and then still all the way in me, I felt something in me that was warm and wet it seemed to come from his thing. He collapsed on top of me with his thing still tight in side, held there in me.
After a while I felt him shrink inside of me but it was still tight. I felt him start to lift up off my back and wiggle his thing inside of me a bit as he took his weight off my back. Dad started to kiss my back telling me how he knew I liked him loving me and how much he knew I liked his present. Then he moved his hands up and across to my boobs squeezing and pulling at them telling me how good I was and how proud he was of me. I just felt dirty and a bit scared but I couldn’t do anything I was still in a daze where I could feel and hear everything but I couldn’t do anything. We stayed like that for a while with him still inside of me while he played with my boobs and told me how good I was.
After a while he removed his hands from my boobs and I could feel him leaning back a bit, his thing was still trapped in me, I didn’t think it was ever coming out when I felt something wet on my anus. He was rubbing his wet finger all around it and probing it with his finger while he was still in me. I could feel him start to push his finger in it like he did with my other entrance. He kept pushing until I felt his finger start to enter it, once it was part way in he held it still while he wiggled his thing still in me. Then he wiggled his finger in my butt. I was hurting but I was starting to like the finger in my anus moving it was a different sort of feelling. Dad was still whispering to me about how good I was and telling how much he loved me and that he just knew I loved his finger in my ass. He started moving his finger in and out slowly it was a strange feeling I could feel pressure on his thing as he continued to move his finger in and out of my butt. Dad then started to move his thing in me with more pressure starting to move in and out like he did before, I could feel his thing getting bigger as he moved. Then he moved me with his other large hand on my chest up so that I was sitting upright on his finger and thing. Dad started to push up into me and then withdraw while holding me against his chest all the while kissing and sucking on my neck. I couldn’t do anything except let him do as he wanted, I was like a rag doll while he continued to go deep inside of me with every thrust in and out of me. He was starting to speed up his thrusting inside of me, he was moaning really loudly in my ear as he kept entering me. Finally with one large thrust as far in me as he could he pushed two fingers into my ass, god it hurt, at the same time I could feel him releasing his warm wettness inside of me as he groaned. He stayed as he was deep inside both holes for a while and then slowly withdrew his fingers and then his thing from me. It really hurt alot to withdraw his thing from me, it was so tight. He layed me down on the bed on my back and then left me there for a while, I am guessing that he went and had a shower as I could hear the water. I was splayed over the bed with my legs hanging wide open, I had no control of my body.
When dad came back in to the bedroom he had a towel around him and he just smiled at me before telling me what a dirty little girl I was and if my mother knew she would kick me out for sure. He went to the dresser and picked up his camera and then came over and kissed me on my slack mouth, thrusting his tongue deep inside of me before withdrawing. Standing up he went to the end of the bed and started to take some photos of me splayed out on the bed. He posed me in different positions with my legs wide open and my hands placed in different positions, he told me I looked fantastic dirty as I was with his juice leeking out of me.
After he had taken a number of photos he told me it was time to get cleaned up for bed. He picked me up and took me to the bathroom and put me in a bath he must have ran for me as the tub was already filled. He layed me down in the tub and started to wash me, I stung from his present down below. When he had finished washing me he told me that he loved me and that I was just to perfect to resist. He withdrew his towel and showed me his thing. He picked up my hand and started to rub it up an down it all the while telling me how he loved it up deep inside me and how now he knew I loved it as well, we would be able to enjoy it all the time. Then he moved so that one of his legs was in the tub with me and the other was outside and he brought his thing up close to my face hanging off the side of the tub. He started to rub his thing with both hands all the while watching me as I lay there. He lent down and kissed me once more in my slack mouth before standing up and aiming his thing inside of my mouth, a little at first and then more and more inside of my mouth as he groaned louder and louder. He was shoving it down my open mouth until all of it was down deep inside of my mouth almost gagging me. I couldn’t do anything, he had complete control of me. Then I felt it somthing warm and wet was filling my mouth I automatically swallowed what was in my mouth and more was filling it, some leaked out the side of my mouth there was so much. Once he finished he looked at me and then went and got the camera again and started to take more photos. He told me that he wanted to keep a record of my firsts, like my first step he wanted my first loving experiences recorded as well.
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The Kama Sutra or Kamasutra is most notable of a group of ancient texts known generically as Kama Shastra (Sanskrit: Kāma Śāstra) by Vatsyayana Part 2 talks about Amorous advances/sexual union Part 2 Chapter- 3 talks about Sexual relationships of the Kissing, where to kiss and how, teasing each other and games, signals and hints for the other person, cleanliness, taking care of teeth, hair, body, nails, physical non-sexual forms of intimacy (scratching, poking, biting, slapping, holding her)
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I woke up early so I could get ready to get down to the conference room to set up for the last day of meetings. I was still tired; I had been up most of the night with Leslie. She loved to fuck all night and in the mornings she still looked fresh as a daisy. Me on the other hand I looked like 40 shades of hell with no sleep. I jumped into the shower, brushed out my long hair, applied some light make-up and slipped into my suit. I grabbed my computer and my bag and headed out my hotel room door. I went to the elevator and hit the ground floor, off into the room downstairs I spotted her almost immediately. She wore a tight little black skirt that was well above her knee. She wore a pair of black peek-a-boo heels and a white blouse that was conservative. Her short black hair was spiked up and shore wore stylish glass down on her little turned up nose.
I had watched her all day flipping around bending over at just the right time so I had a view of her perky little tits, all day she was a huge flirt, I knew that tonight I was going to nail her ass. The conference was over, everyone else was going home but we had decided to spend one more night together before she flew back out to her home. We had a nice quiet dinner and then hit the elevator.
“Baby I’m going to go to my room and change and I’ll come to your room,” Leslie said.
“Okay, I think I’ll shower, and I’ll be out shortly just let yourself in,” I told her.
I went into my room, after making sure she got into hers. I stripped my clothes off and stepped into the shower. It felt good to let the water run over my body. I grabbed the razor to shave my pussy nice and smooth for her. When I stepped out I could smell the candles burning in my room, I knew she was there waiting for me. I brushed through my hair, threw on a little eyeliner, some mascara and put on a white fuzzy robe that hung on the back of the door. I stepped into my room, she had lit at least 12 candles maybe more, and on the big king size bed was a vision in black. She wore a lace bodysuit, thigh highs all black fish net, black heels, her make-up was unusually heavier than I’d seen her in but she looked absolutely gorgeous. I smiled my approval at her; she held a glass of wine that she sipped from with her red full lips. I walked over to her and took the glass from her hand. I started to sip it and sat on the side of the bed we made a little small talk when I decided I need to pay attention to her. I sat the glass down on the table beside the bed.
I leaned over to her and took her leg and pulled her around she giggled, I slipped her black heel off and began to massage her foot she laid back on the pillows. I rubbed her foot and then my hand wandered up her calf. Her legs were slightly spread apart and I could see the outline of her tight little slit. I continued my massage slipping off her other shoe I rubbed that foot and calf as well. After about 10 minutes I started to rub her thighs, gently kneading them, and she let her legs fall apart so I had access to her pussy. I began to trace the slit from the top of her mound just above her clit down to the crack of nice firm ass. She took a deep breath and I knew she was indeed excited. I paid close attention to the outer lips of her pussy. I moved up to her belly to just under her perky round tits. I slid a strap down off her shoulder and pulled it down her arm exposing her tits. Her breasts were round and firm, and she nice little brown spots with red nipples that were as big as my index finger when they got hard. I leaned down and flicked her nipples with my tongue. She loved it; she moved her hips slowly as I sucked her tits. I moved up her neck to her full red lips, I kissed her long and slow my tongue moving in her mouth over her tongue. I moved back to her neck kissing and licking slowly. I was going to make her really want it when I took her tonight.
She continued to move her hips, as I slid the other strap from her arm, and exposed her other tit, I continued to suck and bite her nipples and back up her neck to her mouth. The entire time she rolled her hips trying to grind her pussy into anything she could get close to. I worked her lace body suit down her slender tightly wound body. I rubbed both breast, and kissed and licked one to another. Her nipples were so hard; her brown spots had shriveled up to nothing she was so excited. Her rocking hips continued to get faster and harder, as was her breathing. I slid the body suit down her body and pulled it off her legs. She lay naked on my bed with just her thigh highs on her legs. I went down and rolled them down her long legs, now she was perfect. I slipped my bathrobe off and stood naked at the end of the bed.
“Touch your nipples and make them hard,” she told me.
I pinched my nipples on my large breast; they were much bigger than hers. I pinched them and rolled them between my fingers, they were hard almost as soon as I touched them.
“Lick them,” she said.
I pulled one up to my mouth and began to suck and lick my nipple; she watched me as she moved her hand down between her legs and spread her lips apart.
“Don’t touch your pussy,” I said.
“Why not,” She asked?
“Because baby, you’re going to wait for me to fuck you, that’s what,” I said.
She stopped and started pulling her large red nipples. I went back to work on my tits, I sucked first one then the other for her. I finally moved onto the bed, I was aware that my pussy was throbbing; I wanted to come as much as she did. I started kissing up her legs, and when I hit her thighs I ran my tongue up to her pussy. She was wet, I could see that juice coming from between her lips, and she was going to be absolutely soaked there was no doubt about it. I began to rub gently her lips, and I separated them with both hands. As I pulled apart those lips, I could see the wetness all over her clit, and running from her precious soft little hole. I started on her clit, she moaned softly I looked up at her and her eyes were close as she enjoyed me eating her pussy. My tongue flicked her clit, it was hard and swelled up as I continued to begin to suck it between my lips I held it as I flicked it with my tongue. She loved it to be rubbed on one side more than the other, that’s what I went for. I licked little circles around her spot that felt so good. She moved her hips in the rhythm to my tongue as I continued my relentless licking and sucking. Her thighs clamped around my shoulders as she came, I moved my tongue into that sweet hole to get all of the nectar that she blew into my mouth. She was so good when she came it was sweet, and she shook, her hands held my head as I fucked her with my tongue. I plunged my tongue deep into her, and then I knew she needed more. I took two fingers and slid them into her, she began to buck harder, and I put my mouth back on her clit. I licked and finger fucked her tight pussy, it was losing up as I made her cum two more times.
I moved up beside her on the bed, as I watched her chest heave as she tried to get her composer after she had come three times in less than 20 minutes. She rolled over and faced me; she kissed me on the lips, pressing her tits against mine. I rolled over on my back as she got on top of me. Her pussy was against mine, as she began to suck both of my tits, she leaned down over the bed and came back up with a big purple vibrator. It was a new one I hadn’t seen before, it was big and had a nice clit tickler attached to it. She put it between my legs as she continued to lick and suck my tits. She rolled my hard nipples between her fingers. My pussy throbbed I thought I might cum before she ever touched my pussy. She worked her way down my belly to my nice slick smooth snatch. She moved down between my legs and pulled my pussy lips apart. I propped my head up on two pillows so I could see what she was doing. I am always greatly turned on when I can watch what is being done to me. She spread my pussy lips apart and I watched her tease my clit with her tongue. Her tongue was hot, and very wet she place the tip of her tongue right on the top of my clit. It felt so good I thought that I surely couldn’t last two more seconds while she ate my pussy. She teased me with her tongue; she licked between my inner lips and back up to my clit all with her wet hot tempting little tongue. I nearly exploded into her mouth. She pulled the inner lips apart to expose my hole, picking up the vibrator she slid it between those inner lips which hugged the vibrator nicely as she flipped it on. The middle was full of little beads that worked in a circular motion, it felt like 100 little fingers and tongue rubbing the inside of my pussy. She moved the clit tickler onto my clit, the vibration on the inside and outside was almost more than I could stand. I started to cum, my legs tightened and I bucked my hips against the vibrator, she grabbed the end of it, and began to shove it deeper into my cunt, and back out, I was upon my elbow where I could see the big thing pushing and pulling into me I came, I exploded actually I could feel the cum running out of my pussy and down the crack of my ass.
Once I had recovered enough I reached between my legs and pulled the vibrator out, it was covered in my pussy juice, I shoved it into her mouth and made her lick it clean. She sucked every drop off the vibrator; I rolled her onto her stomach and raised her legs up to the doggy position. Her hot little brown asshole was exposed to me. I put my tongue on her asshole and worked it in as my thumb reached under her and I rubbed her clit. She moaned loudly as my tongue continued to flick her asshole and stick it inside her. I pushed my fingers into her asshole, I slipped them deeper and deeper as I continued to rub her clit with my other hand. She was rocking her as toward me. Once I had her asshole opened up I picked up the vibrator and slipped it into her asshole, she gasped as I moved it in her asshole further. She moaned again, “Fuck me hard baby, fuck that asshole hard,” she moaned. I obliged I rammed the vibrator deeper and deeper into her asshole. As I moved it in and out her ass opened wider and wider. I continued to rub that hard little clit, she was getting close to cumming for me because I could feel her clit getting harder and harder and she wanted that asshole pounded harder. Finally she came, her asshole forced the vibrator out, and her asshole was gaping wide open. It looked so wonderful wide open I slipped my tongue inside she moaned and came again as I slid three fingers into her pussy as I licked her asshole. She came again less than five minutes after the other two times. I loved the way she felt when she came. She lay down on the bed as I let her rest.
We moved up on the pillows together, I held her close, she began to suck my tits, as my hand reached down between my legs, I began to stroke my clit as she sucked. She reached down to her pussy with the other hand. She moved her head up and began to kiss me as we tickled our pussies, I moved over a little so I could watch her long fingers work over her pussy, I was getting wetter by the second , I loved to watch her make herself cum. Her legs were extended her feet flexed as she continued to make herself cum, she rubbed the hard clit between her fingers pulling it and rubbing it. I rubbed mine as well, when she got ready to cum she rolled on top of me, grinding her clit into my pubic bone, I continued to rub my clit harder and harder, as she rode me, she came I felt the hot liquid run out of her onto my waiting hard clit, I came with her the moment that hot juice hit me. We collapsed into a heap on the bed, sleeping it off for at least two more hours of fucking.
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Second part to my story, about twice as long as the first. Give me constructive critisicm please!